thank you for posting your work, below are some comments:
overall I like the direction you took, its human and relatable. (somehow now I am thinking of films like 'sin city' which are based on comics, but perhaps that's beside the point)
the video has a sense of nostalgia and humour which work together to create a glimpse into this character's life, Placing the superhero in ordinary moments is what makes this happen, together with the sound fluctuations, that displace his inner landscape.
comments / suggestions: — type at intro: maybe we can make it look more like a comic? the text that reads "40 years after..." piece can begin with the 'nostalgic' sound introducing that text (40 years) and then cut to the 'kaboom" with its louder sound (defeating the previous), then cut to the bus scene contrasts
maybe the first escalator scene gets a bit more back and forth repetition? think of it as a audio visual texture
try adding a small black screen between the cuts of shots that portray him as hero and those that portray him as normal person eating. this might add more drama because of the rupture (maybe these can be colour screens that echo the big type shots, a sort of transition... may work or may look overdone)
i really like the shot at 1:16, very telling for your piece. this one and the escalator shots are my favourites
maybe the shots where he's eating are set at a slower speed? may work or may not to accentuate difference between them. It will affect the sound and may give it an interesting, slightly dark tone.
i don't think you need the "captain america" poster at 1:33, or maybe you can clip out the figure, keep the zoom motion and overlap or cut directly to him speaking? do you have more footage of him speaking? him being quiet in front of camera? if so, i'd be curious to see
hi alfonso
ReplyDeletethank you for posting your work, below are some comments:
overall I like the direction you took, its human and relatable. (somehow now I am thinking of films like 'sin city' which are based on comics, but perhaps that's beside the point)
the video has a sense of nostalgia and humour which work together to create a glimpse into this character's life, Placing the superhero in ordinary moments is what makes this happen, together with the sound fluctuations, that displace his inner landscape.
comments / suggestions:
— type at intro: maybe we can make it look more like a comic? the text that reads "40 years after..."
piece can begin with the 'nostalgic' sound introducing that text (40 years) and then cut to the 'kaboom" with its louder sound (defeating the previous), then cut to the bus scene
contrasts
maybe the first escalator scene gets a bit more back and forth repetition? think of it as a audio visual texture
try adding a small black screen between the cuts of shots that portray him as hero and those that portray him as normal person eating. this might add more drama because of the rupture
(maybe these can be colour screens that echo the big type shots, a sort of transition... may work or may look overdone)
i really like the shot at 1:16, very telling for your piece. this one and the escalator shots are my favourites
maybe the shots where he's eating are set at a slower speed? may work or may not to accentuate difference between them. It will affect the sound and may give it an interesting, slightly dark tone.
i don't think you need the "captain america" poster at 1:33, or maybe you can clip out the figure, keep the zoom motion and overlap or cut directly to him speaking?
do you have more footage of him speaking? him being quiet in front of camera? if so, i'd be curious to see
hope this helps
thxs
c